Show Don’t Tell by Kristi Bradley

If you’re a writer, you’ve probably heard, “Show don’t tell your story.”

What does that mean?

It means don’t tell us the victim was stabbed, bring her on stage and let the audience hear her scream as the knife slips between her ribs. Another way is to keep adjectives and adverbs (‘ly’ words) to a minimum. Also, do not modify ‘said’ with adverbs. Avoid the word ‘WAS’ and its other forms – am, is, are, will have, have been – as this shows passive voice.

Example:  Instead of – The floor was covered with dirty clothes. Try – I couldn’t see the floor for all the dirty clothes. Avoid the words ‘LOOK’ and ‘FEEL’. Use more powerful words as this is another sign of telling, not showing your story.

Use sensory images, yes, all five senses, when describing the setting. If describing a cave, don’t just tell us it has rocky walls and cold air, but have your character touch the wall – is it covered in moss? Is slime flowing in rivulets? Does her breath fog on her exhalation? Don’t overwhelm the reader with too much description either, sometimes less is more. Find a happy medium.

Avoid clichés – use good comparisons for your metaphors. Vary sentence structure to avoid monotony. Shorter, choppier sentences help draw out suspense and create tension. Good grammar can slow a sentence down. Sometimes writers make mistakes on purpose to make the sentence resonate. Don’t use dialogue for conveying information dumps. Yes, dialogue can give information, but it should not feel like a description. Don’t be afraid to use contractions. People speak in contractions, so your writing needs to show that, too. Language matters. How it happened means turning the action into words the reader will be able to translate and see in their head as if watching a movie. Punctuation matters. It could be the life or death of a sentence. Grab a copy of Eat, Shoots and Leaves by Lynne Truss for your punctuation questions.


Juggling: A Writer’s Life

Authors Pat Sawtelle and Kristi Bradley chat about ways to balance your desire to write with the need to live. This is a great video to help you get off to a satisfying and productive year. Don’t forget to subscribe to the Dark Oak Press and Media channel.

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Keep Warm In January – Cozy up with a book!

January is on average the coldest month of the year in the Northern Hemisphere. It’s time to pick a new book to enjoy as you snuggle up by the fire. Here’s another selection from the authors of Dark Oak Press and Media to choose from.

  • Romance – Dark Passion
  • Fantasy – Chalice Moon
  • Non-Fiction – Seance Experiments
  • Young Adult – When Dragons Sleep
  • Literary – Allan Gilbreath A Short Story Collection

The Debt Women Owe Carrie Fisher by M. B. Weston

When Carrie Fisher passed away, I lost my childhood hero. This death marked the passing of a woman that had a profound effect on my life and the lives of countless women.

My parents took me to the theater to see Star Wars: The Empire Strikes Back when it first opened. I was four. All I remember was watching Darth Vader Force-choking Captain Needa to death and the other characters dragging his body offstage. By the time I was six, however, I was begging my babysitter to let me watch Star Wars (my generation’s official name for A New Hope) on our new, high-tech VCR. I grew up watching and rewatching Han, Luke, and Leia save the galaxy, and Star Wars became my favorite movie series.

I never truly realized how Carrie Fisher’s portrayal of Princess Leia shaped my generation’s view of women. I grew up thinking it was normal to watch a woman not only fighting in a rebellion but actually leading it. I watched Princess Leia wield both a blaster and authority. For me, this was how the world worked. I never thought twice about how my gender might affect my career. I was going to go to college and become a lawyer and then maybe even the Attorney General. It never occurred to me that my gender would get in my way, and Princess Leia’s character developed part of that belief. (I ended up choosing writing as a career instead of law and politics. I got to keep my soul, and that worked out well.)

The Force was strong in Luke and strong in Leia, and I never thought that odd. I wonder how many young girls of my generation grew up, as I did, believing in themselves without worrying about their gender because of the way Carrie Fisher played her role. I’m sure many boys my age grew up watching Star Wars and figured a woman in leadership was normal as well.

While I give most of the credit to George Lucas for creating the character and the storyline, I must also give Carrie Fisher credit for her portrayal of Leia. She made Leia feel real. She made Leia’s accomplishments seem normal. She yelled things like “Into the garbage chute, flyboy!” and “Will someone get this big, walking carpet out of my way?” and made us all think she was awesome. Very few actresses could have pulled that off, yet she did it with grace, dignity, and a blaster that fired red killer lasers.

I honestly believe none of my writing, especially my character Gabriella, would be anything like it is now without Star Wars or Carrie Fisher’s Princess Leia. I also believe that the way she gave Leia’s character legitimacy helped pave the way for my generation of women.

We are indebted to Carrie. The best way to repay that debt is for each of us to finish Leia’s work and become whatever we want to be without a thought of our gender. May the Force be with you, your highness.

On The Spot – Insanity, and Voices In Your Head

More video shorts from the writers at Dark Oak Press and Media. Subscribe today and don’t miss out on the fun. Check out their writing on

On The Spot Volume 4

  • The importance of insanity and voice in funny mysteries (47 plays-wow!). {Phyllis Appleby
  • The characters in your mind won’t shut up even for 30+ years. {Lynn Maples}
  • Maybe asking Ebay about selling body parts wasn’t a good voice to listen to. {Lynn Maples}